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Fat Ojibwe

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Bathers' feet print the stone,
the smoke of shrimp frying in oil
making sweet meat of the air.

Fat Ojibwe sucks the grease glazing his fingers,
peels the crustaceans from their ghost skins,
twists off sheaves of their toothpick legs.

The carapaces ooze when pressed:
Black pearl eyes, wet pebbles –
juices welling between the soft armour plates.

He reaches for a bottle with an oil-dark label,
lugs legs of slow sunshine into the pan
embossed with pepper slices.

Starfish of sliced chilli skim the surface.
Random thing: I got a portfolio coming up so I'm gonna be writing a lot for the next few weeks. :)
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ARIrish's avatar
And now my mouth is watering. Really slick imagery here, so vivid. The breaks come in the right places, and the last line to me recalls the first, as well as completing the whole oceanic imagery.

If I had to pick it apart at all, I'd struggle... somehow 'carapaces' in its plural form strikes me as having an ugly flow, but it's a VERY minor niggle, and the word is just right anyway.

Ugh, this is such a sloppy comment. I'll just wrap it up by saying I'm very taken with it.